Ms.Gonzalez's P.N. is below. Look at the images to see how I revised it. USE your checklist in your writing folder.
My small moment/seed idea.
Below is my revision. Notice how I separated my paragraphs.
Below is my LEAD with my latest revisions. Powerful writers REVISE constantly. Make sure you are writing your DRAFT in PENCIL so that you can revise and edit. Remember to skip lines, and do this one LOOSE LEAF paper!